Sunday, March 7, 2010

I must be getting old...

Sorry readers,

I had a little lapse, and forgot to post Chapter 8 earlier!  I was up at 4:30 this morning to sing at church and then came home, ate, and crashed.  I've been almost useless since.  Hope you enjoy this chapter.  Charlotte makes me smile.

11 comments:

  1. "There was not enough air in the room. There was not enough air in the entire country for her to take in."

    Oh! I see! She must have just finished reading the latest chapter of your story, since that is exactly how I feel each time I read it!

    Brilliant! Breathtaking! Marvelous. I can't wait for more!

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  2. Gayle,

    We sang five songs--mostly Hillsong songs, for three services--I'm part of a worship band. So much fun, but very tiring. It's an 8 hour day. :0)

    Crystal,

    Glad you stayed up for it. Thanks for the kind words.

    Amy

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  3. If you are getting old, then most of the rest of us who comment here are absolutely ancient!

    Le sigh. Chapter 7 is chock full of romantic anticipation.

    BTW, did you know that a cut on the wrong place on a finger can make it hard to type? Ouch! Thought you might want to file that away for future consideration.

    8AM services are killers. I'm so glad ours starts at 9.

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  4. Oops, not 8 AM but an 8 hour day. I did say I was ancient.

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  5. I am so enjoying this!

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  6. I love Hillsong. Darlene's great. I am a better pianist than vocalist, although I enjoy both. I am so glad you're committed to ministry -- enough to get up early and put in a long day.

    I am very much enjoying your story, and the way you're developing your characters. I read the comments on modern vs. regency terminology. I do think that communication of your idea is the salient point. But it is jarring to be reading your beautiful prose and then be confronted with a word that one knows does not belong to the period. It stops the flow that you've created and takes the reader out of your stream of thought. I think that most people who would read your story are doing so with the complete expectation that it is a period piece. They love words like "thither" and "yon" or they wouldn't be reading anything Austen-related anyway. If they don't recognize a term, context will guide them. A little edification in terms of education is good for the soul.

    All the best,
    Gayle

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  7. No worries sweetie! I have been behind all week! xo
    Carrie

    PS.... I am just so antsy! I love every bit of it and can't wait!

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  8. Gayle--

    Thank you for putting so well into words what I was so clumsily trying to express in my critique regarding historical terminology and facts.

    Amy--

    Your story flows so beautifully and is written with such elegance that it's very easy to be captivated by it. It's really quite a sublime experience to be able to immerse oneself so fully in a well-crafted tale.

    Which is why coming across even a minor hiccough like "reign" vs. "rein," or the ponytail/club/queue thing, becomes an issue; it's like a sharp pinch that jerks one out of a wonderful dream.

    In a lesser story, I probably wouldn't even notice it, because I wouldn't be paying close enough attention. With your story, I devour every single word avidly and thus even small errors become stumbling blocks to the immersion experience.

    While I am sure there are some people out there who point out flaws just for the sake of finding fault, I'm not one of them. I critique because I care. A lot.

    Now...can it be Thursday now? ::looks at the clock:: Oh, well, it is! At least in some parts of the country. That counts, right? Right?!

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  9. Thank you Crystal and Gayle,

    I really appreciate hearing from you both and understand that much is expected. I hope to fix everything that is pointed out to me and more. I need friends like you to keep me on my toes.

    And Crystal?? It's tomorrow. :0)

    P.S. Hi Carrie!!

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